I'm starting to think the way I do dialogue is weird, and uncommon. I mean I know I'm not the only writer who does it, but it's just different. Here's an example. This example is a romantic thriller about an attractive young blonde Kindergarten teacher that has a crush on an rugged looking janitor.

  • First Person

Today is the first day of school. As I'm laying out the workbooks for the students before they arrive. I look outside the window towards the courtyard. With suspense, I stare deeply at Mr. Green the janitor doing yard work. He looks like James Dean, he's so handsome. However my lustful infatuation daydream is interrupted when the headmistress Mrs. Carrington very bitchly yells out to me.

"Ms. Appleton, stop staring out that window and get back to work. The children will be here soon."

Ugh this bitch, who the hell does she think she is? I don't want to upset my boss, so I reply back to her obediently.

"Yes I'm sorry. I'll get back to work ma'am."

  • Third Person

Ms. Appleton, the young lovely blonde teacher is preparing her classroom for the first day of school. She is laying out workbooks for the students before they arrive. Momentarily, she suspends her tasks to look outside the window. Fixated on Mr. Green, the janitor whom she has a strange infatuation on and christens to James Dean. As he's doing yard work, she feels a wave of positive emotions from staring at him. However, the headmistress Mrs. Carrington comes into the classroom shouting at Ms. Appleton.

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"Ms. Appleton, stop staring at that window and get back to work. The children will be here soon."

Ms. Appleton although obedient, thinks very poorly of Mrs. Carrington and considers her a bitch. Although, she politely responds to her.

"Yes I'm sorry. I'll get back to work ma'am."


So that's my dialogue style and yeah. That's how I write, and I wanted to discuss it because I know it's uncommon.

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